Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.
(+) What works? (praise)
Does a good job to add opinion throughout, even during summarizing the plot. Addresses flaws and its better qualities while still making it pretty clear the position you have taken. Very thorough plot summary.
(-) What Doesn’t (polish)
In the first paragraph, it might do better to stick to one scene and describe it in vivid detail to draw your reader in rather than diving straight into plot summary. You should save that for the following few paragraphs. Also in that first paragraph, try to use more descriptive details to describe the armor than “very tough looking.” I think overall you did a good job to address to strengths and weaknesses and made it clear why you took the position you did, but there was too much plot summary. It tells too much about what happened in terms of storyline and makes it seem like that is the film’s only flaw. Try to cut some of that out, focusing on the important stuff and not giving too much away, and add details about scenes and things that bothered you.
(?) Questions?
At the end, you mention the grammar of the translations being terrible and taking away from the movie. Can you give some examples of the translations that show how laughable they really were?
Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.
(+) What works? (praise)
I think the fact that it’s a foreign film makes it interesting to read.
You do a good job with the story telling.
(-) What Doesn’t (polish)
I think you expand more on the actors, actresses, the producers and the directors.
You should include more works.
Compare this work with other works by the director.
Criticize whether you were satisfied with the action.
(?) Questions?
Think whether or not if you know the complexity of the movie.
What made you think about writing about a foreign film?
acarzoli said,
April 24, 2008 at 10:38 am
Notes for Peer’s Oral Response
Essay # _3__
Writer _____Betim Efendija______ Peer Respondent ___Amanda Carzoli___________
Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.
(+) What works? (praise)
Does a good job to add opinion throughout, even during summarizing the plot. Addresses flaws and its better qualities while still making it pretty clear the position you have taken. Very thorough plot summary.
(-) What Doesn’t (polish)
In the first paragraph, it might do better to stick to one scene and describe it in vivid detail to draw your reader in rather than diving straight into plot summary. You should save that for the following few paragraphs. Also in that first paragraph, try to use more descriptive details to describe the armor than “very tough looking.” I think overall you did a good job to address to strengths and weaknesses and made it clear why you took the position you did, but there was too much plot summary. It tells too much about what happened in terms of storyline and makes it seem like that is the film’s only flaw. Try to cut some of that out, focusing on the important stuff and not giving too much away, and add details about scenes and things that bothered you.
(?) Questions?
At the end, you mention the grammar of the translations being terrible and taking away from the movie. Can you give some examples of the translations that show how laughable they really were?
nadib al-islam said,
April 24, 2008 at 10:41 am
Essay # 1
Writer : Betim Efendija Peer Respondent : Nadib Al-Islam
Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.
(+) What works? (praise)
I think the fact that it’s a foreign film makes it interesting to read.
You do a good job with the story telling.
(-) What Doesn’t (polish)
I think you expand more on the actors, actresses, the producers and the directors.
You should include more works.
Compare this work with other works by the director.
Criticize whether you were satisfied with the action.
(?) Questions?
Think whether or not if you know the complexity of the movie.
What made you think about writing about a foreign film?